Number of entries: 6
If it Feels Right
Submitted: January 20, 2022 at 9:19 am Composed/performed by: Greg Beck, gregb@mac.com Copyright: 2021
If it Feels Right
The music stopped the dance is over
They turned up the lights
The crowd has headed out the door
But you and I we’re still on the floor
Holding you close
Dancing real slow
Before they finally make us go
There is something that I really need to know
Chorus:
If it feels right
You could stay the night
Get to know each other better
Watch the sun come up together
If it feels right
Stay with me tonight
We could talk and take it slow
But first I gotta to know
If it feels right
People get on people fall off
The romance carousel
When you catch your next ride
Well you can never tell
But we’re on it now
Spinning real fast
As we hold each other tight
If you want the night to last it’s time to decide
[Repeat Chorus]
I could drive you home if that’s what you want
We could say goodnight and see each other again
But there’s some things you can’t hide
I see you smiling with your eyes
I think that maybe you don’t want this night to end
So
[Repeat Chorus]
©Greg Beck | gregb@mac.com | 320-266-2460
I’ve been writing songs for about a year and a half, about 40 written so far.
Things to look at: Lack of rhymes at the end of the second verse. Needed? Does it need another verse? Fewer chorus repeats at the end? I tried to sing each chorus repeat a bit differently to add variety. Overall vibe. This is the first more heavily produced songs I’ve recorded.
Don’t Let Him Win
Submitted: January 20, 2022 at 2:24 pm Composed/performed by: Mikkell Johnson, mikkellbest@gmail.com Copyright: 2022
Don’t Let Him Win
High atop my pony
I smelled his sweat and grabbed his mane
I took a nervous breath when mom handed me his reins
We raced along the pasture through the trees hills and swamps
When he threw me off his back momma dried my tears and said
Chorus:
You’ve gotta get up
Every time you fall
Don’t give in
Get up and give your all
Your ego is bruised
And your heart may be broken
But you’re tougher than this
Don’t let your spirit get stolen
Don’t let him win
Long black hair and leather
I thought he was the one for me
On his motorcycle was where I wanted to be
We rode open highways at one hundred miles an hour
When he left me at that motel I called momma on the phone
Repeat Chorus
A bully in a suit
His voice was raised his face was red
Women weren’t meant for roles of power he said
As I tried to climb the ladder he’d cut the next rung
When I walked him out the door I called momma and said
Chorus 2:
I got back up
Every time I fell
I didn’t give in
I got up and gave ‘em hell
My ego was bruised
And my heart nearly broken
But I’m tougher than that
I didn’t let my spirit get stolen
I didn’t let him win
Alternate/Additional Verse
Whiskey in a bottle
The Devil wouldn’t let me be
he said one more sip was all I needed to be free
He took my hand and led me to a dark dead-end road
When the light of hope shined in I called momma on the phone
©Mikkell Johnson 2022 mikkellbest@gmail.com 320-224-6596
This is the third song I’ve written. I have the alternate/additional verse at the end as I originally wrote four verses but it gets over 4 minutes long so I thought it was too much with it but I wanted to throw it out there to see if people liked it more than my third verse. I’m a newbie so I’m totally open to any comments and welcome them! Thanks!
Everybody Wanna Be An Adjective
Submitted: January 20, 2022 at 2:40 pm Composed/performed by: Paul Nye, paulenye@me.com Copyright: 2021
Wrote this song few years ago. Copyright is 2021. Changed lyrics from recording. New lyrics are in lyric sheet posted. Need input on lyrics. Also, please note the number of elements (i.e. Choruses, Verses, Bridge, Solos, Rap, Intro/Outro, etc.) I crammed into a song that clocks in under 3:00 min. Do I need more? Mix feedback is requested as well – overall vibe/marketability of song. Just want to add the dual irony of the song,….being a cultural statement music/artists today, & use of language – primarily on social media. The irony is the grammar in the song is intentionally bad…a little slight at the trend on social media.
Cabin in the Swamp
Submitted: January 20, 2022 at 3:15 pm Composed/performed by: Chris Graybill, chrisgraybill@gmail.com Copyright: 2022
Where the pavement ends and the cattails start
Where it’s not quite light and it’s not quite dark
And Spanish moss hangs down like witches hair
Where gators glide like wicked thoughts
And your last hope is all you got
Sometimes late at night you’ll find me there
Lonely and lost, I fret and cry
And wonder what it’s like to die
I’m twisted up inside like mangrove trees
The world’s a swamp, nothing’s fair
Why go on, no one cares
If that cold black water swallows me
But then I see, I realize
Something’s rising up before my eyes
There’s a cabin in the swamp
Where pythons squeeze and gators chomp
It’s waiting there for you when all else fades
Come on in, the door’s ajar
You might just find out who you are
Back at the shack in the everloving Everglades
I go inside, the room is bare
Four plain walls and a wooden chair
So I decide to sit and take my rest
Again my brain gets swept away
With dreams and schemes and yesterday
Worry, greed, shame, anger and regret
I sat through storms, I sat through tears
Maybe days, might be years
But the fever in my mind wouldn’t break
I heard the wind sigh “let it go”
But I’m always the last to know
Until I heard the night bird sing “awake”
I open my eyes, my sight is clear
Cabin and swamp both disappear
My soul feels new and clean as morning rain
And I see the world more straight and true
Might not be heaven but it’ll do
Sure am glad to be back home again
So if you’re down and lost your mind
You want to leave this world behind
When you decide to quit this masquerade
Remember that cabin and the wooden chair
Come on down, I might be there
Back in the shack in the everloving Everglades
You might find your mind in the everloving Everglades
New to MAS and songwriting. All comments welcome. chrisgraybill@gmail.com
One White Rose
Submitted: January 21, 2022 at 9:31 am Composed/performed by: Douglas Millaway Douglas, virgil.trucker@gmail.com Jake Hagedorn, virgil.trucker@gmail.com Victoria Vox, virgil.trucker@gmail.com Copyright: ©2015, 2021, 2022
ONE WHITE ROSE (Millaway, Hagedorn, Vox)
Wishing you won’t turn and go.
Maybe it’s not worth my time.
But there are people we both know
They think I can change your mind,
If you want to go it’s up to you.
If you want to stay, that’s OK too.
If you think now’s the time, the time for you to go,
All I’ll have left is One White Rose.
Pretty roses in the vase
Freshly cut from the vine
A look of heartbreak on your face.
Tears of sadness are all mine.
If you need some time, it’s up to you.
If you need some space, that’s OK too.
If you think now’s the time, the time for you to go,
All I’ll have left is One White Rose.
I’ve tried everything I know.
I’m begging you not to go
So when there’s nothing left for me to do
My One White Rose will turn blue
The candles left are burning low
You haven’t touched your favorite wine.
The scent of flowers in the air.
Like my love will fade in time.
If you want my heart it’s up to you.
If you want my soul that’s OK too.
If you think now’s the time, the time for you to go,
All I’ll have left is One White Rose.
Outro
One white rose
One white rose
We think we are pretty close on this song. Lyric and structure have gone through significant changes, and we’re just about ready to start pitching it. Interested in overall opinions.
Yesterday is Long Gone
Submitted: January 23, 2022 at 3:13 pm Composed/performed by: Michael Kleinhaus, kleinhaus.michael@gmail.com Copyright: 2021
Yesterday is Long Gone
Help I’ve fallen down
Where’s my brother now?
When we were young
We were strong
But yesterday is long gone
Like a cold morning waiting for the sun
Dad is angry now
He is coming down
When we were young
You were strong
But yesterday is long gone
Like a dark night waiting for the sun
I am older now
I am here somehow
When I was young
You carried me along
But yesterday is long gone
Like a cold morning
Like a dark night
Like spring waiting for the sun
First time submitting a song to MAS for review. This was recorded on my phone.
