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Number of entries: 9

Sometimes

Submitted: November 21, 2021 at 12:42 pm
Composed/performed by: Greg Beck, gregb@mac.com
Copyright: 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/Sometimes.rtf

Lyrics:

Sometimes
Sometimes late at night
I see pictures in my mind
Of people and of places I once knew
The woodlands and valleys
And the girl I left behind
Mistakes I made, I know I can’t undo
Yesterday
So Far Away

If I’d stuck around
I’d still be working at the mill
Every day just like the one before
The path or least resistance
But my mind would not sit still
Grabbed my guitar and headed out the door
Left to see
What I could be

Building up inside me
The things I must express
Music was the vehicle I chose
Traveling town town
My soul I would profess
In every line and verse I would compose
Come and see
I’ll play for free

Twenty years have passed
Since I set out on the road
Some would say I’ve wasted half my life
But it’s life that I’ve been living
And I’ve reaped what I have sowed
A life with no regrets or sacrifice
What I am
Is what I am

Never found a place that could contain me
Living for what’s next is what sustains me

But sometimes late at night
I see pictures in my mind
Of people and of places I once knew
The woodlands and valleys
And the girl I left behind
Mistakes I made I know I can’t undo

©Greg Beck | gregb@mac.com | 320-266-2460

You may send song comments directly to me at gregb@mac.com

Comments by composer(s):

I'm planning to re-record this one to get better quality and to make possible changes.

User ID: Gregory Allen Beck

Stagger Lee

Submitted: November 22, 2021 at 8:43 am
Composed/performed by: Brad Dunsé, lists@braddunse.com
Copyright: ©2021 Brad Dunse

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/Stagger-Lee.rtf

Lyrics:

Stagger Lee

She walked by on the sidewalk
With her shopping cart full of clothes
A Walmart bag shivered in the wind full of everything she owned
Labeled just a drunk
She’d sometimes slip off in the grass
Rumor was her morning started straight off the flask
Her weathered face made her look kind a mean
So they called her Stagger Lee

I met her at the sidewalk
With a twenty in my hand
When her eyes met mine I’d knew I’d never understand
All the pain she’d been through
All the trouble all the loss
I could hear it in her voice, she paid some kind of cost
A neighbor yelled out, son you are naïve
Don’t you know that’s Stagger Lee

Watching her shuffle down the street
I wonder who she really was
Was she someone’s grandma
Was she loved?
When she reached the corner
She turned to me and smiled
We stared at one another for a while
I wondered if this town would ever see
She was more than Stagger Lee

The gossip at the diner
Came with the morning news
The woman that they found face down was Linda McCloo
The photograph was blurry
The news print smeared from snow
Weren’t nobody in that place who really didn’t know
They all made a choice to see
Just old Stagger Lee

At the end of my driveway
I found a shopping cart full of clothes
A Walmart bag blowing in the wind full of everything she owned

You may send song comments directly to me at lists@braddunse.com

Comments by composer(s):

Lyrics slightly different than recording in a couple places. Written on a rare to find, but not all that valuable, 1970 Lyle classical guitar I call "The Scrub". Al Ynigues recently patched two holes in her and brought her back to life for me. Recorded on an iPhone, so don't expect much there 😉. I wrote it based on a lady who walks by here from time to time with her shopping cart. I wanted it to serve as awareness human life has value we ought considre and not pass judgment. Not a success story, but a place to start considering others. I didn't want it preachy. Wondering if it met the target or not. Is there anything confusing about it? Thanks. Can also send feedback to lists@braddunse.com

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I Just Loves To Read

Submitted: November 22, 2021 at 9:15 am
Composed/performed by: Paul Nye, paulenye@me.com
Copyright: 2020

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/I-JUST-LOVES-TO-READ-RTF-©-by-Paul-Nye.rtf

Lyrics:

I Just Loves To Read
By Paul Nye

Chorus:
I just loves to read, and devour books
I just loves to read, I’m not as dumb as I looks
I just loves to read, & chew on every word
It might sound pretty silly, and seem quite absurd
I’m the dog who loves to read

I licky the lines in my books & paw letters in the alphabet
Drool on every sentence I read
Yeah, I’m that a floppy-eared dog; your really cool pet
Cuz I’m a reading dog… And that’s a very strange breed

Repeat Chorus

I pants when I read a really good tale
And bark when I wanna turn the page
I like to sniff & scratch, and lick out every single detail
Cuz in dog years, I'm way beyond my age

Tag:
It might sound pretty silly, and seem quite absurd
I’m that dog… I’m the dog – bow wow wow wow
I’m the dog, who loves to read

You may send song comments directly to me at paulenye@me.com

Comments by composer(s):

This song was part of a songwriting challenge (by another songwriting organization) to write a song from the perspective of an animal. Based on a true story when my dog ate 4 library books on 4 different occasions over a period of 4 months (really). The irony is my wife was on the library board. Still paid over $100 to replace the books. Let's just say that the dog was well-fed and well-read. Her choice in reading material was even more intriguing. Would like to release this on an acoustic album (yes, Paul Nye is actually considering doing an "under-produced" album). This particular recording was done in one take with minimal miking….basically lo-fi recording/production.

User ID: Paul Nye

There is One

Submitted: November 22, 2021 at 10:11 am
Composed/performed by: Charles Betz, char@betzfamily.info
Copyright: 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/There-is-one.rtf

Lyrics:

I walk along these broken roads
Shadows in my hand
Dust within me spreads into my bones
But I begin to hear across these mad and troubled lands
A quiet song and rhyme
Been there all the time
Echoing some words I think I start to understand

Chorus
There is one … one sun on the horizon
There is one moon that shines above the sea

We are one … one family of sharing
We are one song of love, you and me

Verse
Let's go on a journey
Together we're strong
A pathway to lead us
To start living from the heart
And remember the place we belong

So tired of anger
Poisons the mind
Let’s climb in the mountains
that lift us above the mist
And leave those ways behind

(Chorus)

Bridge
See us fly
Soar through the echoing sky
World beyond
Calling out through the golden … dawn

Chorus (ritard, big crescendo, 1/2 step gear change)

There is one … one sun on the horizon
There is one moon that shines above the sea

We are one … one family of sharing
We are one song of love,
One song of love
One shining song of love, you and me

You may send song comments directly to me at char@betzfamily.info

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THIS TOWN CAN'T BREATHE

Submitted: November 22, 2021 at 2:01 pm
Composed/performed by: Douglas Millaway Douglas, virgil.trucker@gmail.com
Copyright: 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/This-Town-Cant-Breathe.rtf

Lyrics:

This Town Can’t Breathe

Mainstreet lost its soul today
We watched history disappear
Heard snapping from the beams of oak
As we waited for the smoke to clear.
A fire started late at night
Volunteers tried their best
They stopped the blaze at the Catholic church
But they couldn’t save the rest.

It was Wilson’s Hardware
Then Jensen’s Bakery
And the old Piggly Wiggly store.
It was the local barber
Then the Standard Station
And the town cafe next door
This old town can’t take it anymore
This town can’t breathe any more.

Signs of sidewalk hopscotch
Bottles returned for their two cents
Dandelions in the cracks
Now we know what they all meant
It wasn’t just wood and bricks
It was stories of the past
They’ll replace it with a big box store
Those memories just don’t last.

You may send song comments directly to me at virgil.trucker@gmail.com

Comments by composer(s):

This song came from Chad's lesson last week in a free writing exercise. I wrote the first verse during the workshop.

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Please Don't Say Goodbye (when you leave anymore)

Submitted: November 22, 2021 at 5:15 pm
Composed/performed by: Bill Davis Davis, bill@fabcor.net
Copyright: Bill Davis all rights reserved 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/Please-Dont-Say-Goodbye-when-you-leave-anymore-Lyrics-Sheet-1.rtf

Lyrics:

Please Don’t Say Goodbye (when you leave anymore)
Bill Davis ©2021

Verse 1
Started so young ‘fore we knew who we were
Living in bliss each day seemed a blur
Always somewhere , forging ahead
Making our own way, different lives we led

Pre-Chorus
It happens every time you go, those parting words you say
It always leaves me wond’rin’ why you go away

Chorus
One day I knew deep in my heart
That a life together sometimes falls apart
So spare me the word as you head out the door
Please Don’t say goodbye, when you leave anymore

Verse 2
One day I came home found you weren’t there
Fate found a life for us brought us somewhere
The things we thought were true brought us to this place
Those same truths will lead us to finally part our ways

Pre Chorus

Chorus

Bridge
Oh tell me where’d the time go
(tell me) (time go)
We really lost our way
(we really) (lost our way)
I’ll always hold the things we had (and)
(always) (things we had)
I loved you any—–way
(I loved you any way)

Chorus

Tag
Please Don’t say goodbye, when you leave anymore

You may send song comments directly to me at bill@fabcor.net

Comments by composer(s):

Some of the words don't match the lyrics sheet – the lyrics sheet is correct. This is a scratch recording with a couple vocal overdubs – I sang the words wrong in a couple places

User ID: Bill Davis

You Sound Like Music

Submitted: November 24, 2021 at 10:24 am
Composed/performed by: larry Seuss, Lsuess9@gmail.com
Copyright: 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/You-Sound-Like-Music-Larry-Seuss-1.rtf

Lyrics:

You Sound Like Music – Larry Seuss
You sound like music to my ears
Sweet sounding music to my ears
Hear your voice soft and clear
You sound like music to my ears

You sound like music in the Spring
Light-hearted songbirds sing
Sweet refrain like April rain
You sound like music to my ears

Summertime, hear kids by the water
Splashing and laughing in waves
That’s the joy I feel around you
Hear your laughter and my troubles float away

You sound like music in the Fall
Kicking up leaves that whirl and tumble
Your colors and tones, I like ‘em all
You sound like music, changing music, music to my ears

You sound like music to my ears
Even winter music to my ears
Snow may crunch and wind may blow
You sound like music, warm sweet music
Music to my ears
To my heart, to my soul, you sound like music

You may send song comments directly to me at Lsuess9@gmail.com

Comments by composer(s):

User ID: Doug Millaway

Two Flags Flyin'

Submitted: November 24, 2021 at 11:18 am
Composed/performed by: Terry Kennedy-Lares Terry, TurloughKennedy@aol.com
Copyright: 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/Music-review.rtf

Lyrics:

He’s got two flags flyin’ on the back of his truck,
An American Dreamer down on his luck,
Fishin’ for women but his tackle is light,
In his 98 Ranger he’s cruisin’ tonight.

Chorus (alternate last lines)
He’s got two flags flyin’, He’s got two flags flyin’, He’s got two flags flyin’,
(A Patriot-Rebel) drivin’ down the road.
(Confederate-Yankee)
(Freedom loving-Fascist)
(War loving-Christian)

He flies the Rebel Flag and the Stars and the Stripes,
Don’t Tread on Him cause he’s the dangerous type,
Down in the basement of his momma’s home,
He lives out his Dream there all alone.

Chorus

Bridge: Oh no, he’s not confused, by the data and the facts,
He listens to the “Q”, don’t need no Liberal attacks.

Instrumental solo

He’s got two flags flyin’ on the back of his truck,
His wheels bogged down in that conspiracy muck,
A Cross and a Swastika hangin’ on his dash,
and under his seat he keeps his stash.

You may send song comments directly to me at TurloughKennedy@aol.com

Comments by composer(s):

I uploaded a scratch track for people to listen to for the song review. I have a lot of other songs I am working on right now, so this has been at the bottom of my pile. A lot will change once I get to the recording process. I appreciate any critiques people will have.

User ID: Terry Kennedy-Lares

The Man In Black Is Wearing Robes Of White

Submitted: November 24, 2021 at 3:37 pm
Composed/performed by: JOHN BENNETT, storehousepro@comcast.net
Copyright: 2021

Lyrics sheet: https://mnsongwriters.org/wp-content/uploads/formidable/10/The-Man-In-Black-is-Wearing-Robes-Of-White-by-John-Bennet.rtf

Lyrics:

The Man In Black Is Wearing Robes Of White

I wanna say a few words about Johnny Cash
Who was also known as the man in black
He never wore bright colors or anything that flashed
And he slung his guitar around his back

he wore black for the poor man left without
Black for the all the prisoners beaten down
But now the man in black is gone
And he’s walking Heaven’s road
That mansion in the sky is his abode

CH
OH THE MAN IN BLACK IS WEARING ROBES OF WHITE
HE'S WALKING STREETS OF GOLD UP IN THE SKY
SINCE HE GAVE HIS LIFE TO CHRIST HIS SOUL WILL NEVER DIE
NOW THE MAN IN BLACK IS WEARING ROBES OF WHITE

Well the man in black had some demons in his life
That brought him to the brink of suicide
he took many pills and the pills started taking him
June led to the Lord and the Lord let him in

He wore black for all the victims who have died
Black for the man who was whipped and crucified
He never grew tired of trying to make things right
And now he’s living up in those mansions in the sky

You may send song comments directly to me at storehousepro@comcast.net

Comments by composer(s):

Not main stream but outlaw music

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